I’m not a grammar expert or anything but I’m pretty sure all those commas weren’t necessary
If you read this out loud and pause at the commas it sounds like a truck driver with asthma.
Ugh. I’m sad to learn that I have some of the same writing issues as Stephenie Meyer. My general rule is that after I write something, I go back and take out half the commas, praying that they’re the right half.
- Margaery Tyrell: Wait a second! How do I know you’re not just exaggerating Joffrey’s horribleness just so I don’t try and get with him? For all I know, you’re still holding a torch!
- Sansa Stark: Girl, if a park ranger warns you about the bears, it ain’t because he’s trying to keep all the bear hugs for himself.